My family rarely spends time together. We go to Foxwoods on weekends, but now-a-days the thrill factor has faded. We usually stay in The Great Cedar, and sometimes if my brother and I take friends we take the shuttle from building to building. My favorite thing to do there is play elevator tag, but that's a whole different story. Now my dad is a pretty generous guy, we get along well, and I look up to him, but I dread when he makes us go to Foxwoods, up until now.
This weekend was one of my top weekends by far. On Friday I unfortunately had to attend school, and then a doctor’s appointment, but then my mom, brother, and I left for Connecticut. The drive takes about two hours, and my brother, Ethan, is younger than me, so if you have a younger brother you feel my pain… Luckily, I beat him to the front seat so I got to play “DJ”. My favorite genre of music is rap, which couldn’t be more opposite of my mom and Ethan’s preferences, but hey you win some you lose some, right?
We stayed at The Mystic Marriott, because Foxwoods didn’t have any rooms available for this particular weekend, but to be honest, I liked staying at The Marriott a lot better. It was really nice there; the service was good, their restaurant, The Octagon, was delicious, and the pool was ridiculously warm! Normally I don’t swim because I get cold relatively easy, but I swam a good amount of time this weekend. After we arrived we didn’t have much time to eat, but we drove over to Foxwoods after check-in and watched The Counting Crows perform live. They aren’t as popular as they used to be, and I don’t regularly listen to their music, but it was a fun thing to experience.
Saturday came quick; we woke up and drove over to The Mystic Aquarium. My brother and I weren’t too excited, and we tried getting out of it, but at the end of the day, I had a good time. When we first got there, they had a huge tub where you could go touch sting rays, and when I touched one it felt like actually jello, they’re bodies, I guess you could say, are so smooth. Next we watched the sea lion show, their biggest sea lion weighed in at eight hundred pounds, he was the male dominant, and his name was Cocoa. There was also a baby sea lion, her name was Skinner, and she was three years old. Most adorable thing I’ve ever seen. We saw many other animals, but my absolute favorite sea creatures for some reason are starfish. I got to hold a giant star fish. I just think they look and feel so cool. They remind me of SpongeBob.
We got back to the hotel around three, and just as we were walking in my dad was walking out, so instead of leaving he stayed and treated us to a wonderful lunch. I got a Panini with turkey, my favorite. The rest of our little vacation was relaxing, which is just what I needed. My mom and I went to get pedicures at the spa, and the lady who did my toes was a little on the crazy side so she did my nails for free, but I’m sure it was just because she was really nice
All and all, I love my family, and it was extremely nice and generous of my dad to treat my family like he did. I had a great weekend and had a few new experiences!
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1. Do you go there every weekend?
ReplyDelete2. You have a nice, clear voice in your writing.
3. There should be a comma after Friday in the second paragraph.
I agree with Maggie--your writing voice is very strong and perfectly suitable for an assignment such as this. It has the effect of drawing the reader in to the story, and you treat your audience like an old friend. That warmth shines through in the writing.
ReplyDeleteTwo things:
1. Watch out for their/they're/there. You've still got to learn those uses!
2. While this piece tells a nice story, the real story goes untold. The first paragraph says that you don't spend time together, yet the whole post is about spending time with the fam! If there was a little bit less "we did this, we did that" and a little more about that "spending time together" statement, you'd have a weightier, more introspective piece that would be more interesting for the audience. Think of it as adding more commentary to the piece.